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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. other people believe that in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is commonly believed that science and
technology
 subjects should be given priority
than
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history
.
However
, some
people
, including myself, do believe that one of the most important subjects taught in schools is
history
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both viewpoints and give
rationale
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 for my
view point
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. On the one hand, in
this
 modern world,
people
 cannot perform even basic daily tasks without the
knowledge
 of
technology
. If someone wants to make a phone call or money handling with the bank or even transportation is involved with the latest
technology
 and the individual must have an understanding of the
technology
 involved with that.
For example
, nowadays, when you do money transactions with the bank you should have to have the access to the app of the particular bank on your mobile device unless it cannot be processed.
On the other hand
, learning
history
 helps
people
 to correct past mistakes which their ancestors made.
This
 has helped to stop going to wars between two parties on many occasions. A good example of
this
 is the current situation in Sri Lanka. Sri Lanka suffered from three decades of
war
 between the Sinhala
people
 and the Tamil
people
. The
war
 came to an end in 2009 and the government decided to teach students about
this
war
 and its consequences through
history
 subjects in school. It is being over ten years now since the
war
 ended and all the young generation have a good understanding of the past situation and they are not likely to make the same mistake as their fathers made in the future. In conclusion,
as
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knowledge
 of science and
technology
 is important because nowadays we cannot accomplish even basic daily activities without its
knowledge
,
knowledge
 of
history
 is
also
 important to avoid making past mistakes. (Words 297)
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  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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