The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.
This
bar chart shows in comparison how people in a European city travel to work which are bus
, car
, bike
and foot
in certain years 1960, 1980 and 2000.
First of all, the
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foot
was the most popular way of going to work in the 60s,
and follows by Remove the comma
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bike
, bus
and car
to go down because walking got around 33%, the bike
had 21% furthermore
bus
was 18% and 6% for the Correct article usage
the bus
car
.
Secondly
, despite the past year, the bus
got the highest percentage of all in the 80s and went car
, bike
and lastly
foot
. Let's start with the bus
which was 26%, the second was cars 23%, the third was the bike
20% and the Fix the agreement mistake
bikes
last
was the foot
17%. It dramatically changed compared to 1960.
Lastly
, In 2000, start
from top to Wrong verb form
starting
last
went by the
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car
, the
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bus
, the
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foot
and bike
. the car
got 36% which was the highest ranking of all those years, on the other hand
, the bike
was only 6% which the
most unusable way of transmission of all.Add a missing verb
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, lastly".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus, car, bike, foot with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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