The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.

The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.
This
bar chart shows in comparison how people in a European city travel to work which are
bus
,
car
,
bike
and
foot
in certain years 1960, 1980 and 2000. First of all,
the
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foot
was the most popular way of going to work in the 60s
,
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and follows by
bike
,
bus
and
car
to go down because walking got around 33%, the
bike
had 21%
furthermore
bus
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was 18% and 6% for the
car
.
Secondly
, despite the past year, the
bus
got the highest percentage of all in the 80s and went
car
,
bike
and
lastly
foot
. Let's start with the
bus
which was 26%, the second was cars 23%, the third was the
bike
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20% and the
last
was the
foot
17%. It dramatically changed compared to 1960.
Lastly
, In 2000,
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from top to
last
went by
the
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car
,
the
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bus
,
the
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foot
and
bike
. the
car
got 36% which was the highest ranking of all those years,
on the other hand
, the
bike
was only 6% which
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most unusable way of transmission of all.
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