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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided data compares the amount of milk manufactured in 1990, 2000, and 2010 by country.
Overall
, throughout the years, the Netherlands topped the chart, followed by Australia,
Tanzania
, and
Guatemala
.
While
 the amount of milk produced in
Tanzania
 and
Guatemala
 eased up, Australia produced
fewer
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 milk as
the
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time went by. Among the
countires
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countries
, the dairy produced in the Netherlands and Australia
were
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 much higher than
the
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in the
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 other two. The number of
litres
 produced in the Netherlands slightly fluctuated but remained the highest, which
were
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was
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 all in the eleven
millions
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million
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.
On the other hand
, the Australian
also
 started in their eleven
millions
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million
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 in 1990 and 2000 but drastically plunged to nine
millions
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million
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 in 2010. Meanwhile,
Tanzania
 began significantly lower at 87,000
litres
 in 1990,
leaped
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 up to 142,000 in 2000 and continued to
edged
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 up to 155,000
litres
 in 2010. At the bottom of the table, stood
Guatemala
 which produced only 26,000
litres
 in 1990.
Although
 the number doubled
up
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to 55,000 in 2000 and constantly rocketed up to 84,000
litres
 in 2010,
the
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Guatemala
 finished at only half the amount of
Tanzania
.
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