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the pie charts below compare the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001

the pie charts below compare the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001
The chart is comparing the difference that happened yearly in spending for
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school
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 in the UK , between 1981 and 1991.
Overall
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, teachers' wages become higher compared to what was before 10
years
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, insurance did not change a lot
in
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 the
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 and remained the lowest spending category.
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, furniture and equipment rose significantly from where it was.
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 with, the spending on resources like books
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 about 15% in 1981 and rose by only %5 to become 20% in 1991.teacher's wages were the highest school expenditure which took almost half of it in both
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 1981 and 1991 at 40% and 50% respectively, but the other workers were much less than the teachers at 25% on average. In regards to furniture and equipment , it decreased by 10% when it was higher in 1981 at 15 percentage.
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, insurance was the lowest in school spending in the
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 1981 and 1991, at 2% for the former and 3% for the latter.

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