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many graduates want to start their first job in a big corporation. many others prefer to work for a small company first. compare and contrast their choices and express your opinion

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In
this
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 modern world individuals after completing higher studies immediately look for
job
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 opportunities to make a living.Some believe that the initial startup should be with a well-known company
while
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 others argue to start with a small business for more experience.In my essay,I will highlight both views and strongly believe that working in a small industry will have more
benefits
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To begin
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,many institutions nowadays conduct on-campus selections after students graduate from their universities.They hire big companies to conduct interviews and select their best candidate.People are more inclined
in joining
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to join
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such
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 associations because they provide good salaries and additional
benefits
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.To illustrate, it has been reported that around 25% of the employees in higher companies are fresh graduates ,when interviewed for opting for
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 positions most of them said they are being paid a good income and their company
also
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 covers their health insurance.
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,with
benefits
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comes
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 some drawbacks,and one of the drawbacks of
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 jobs is
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 security.These corporations take individuals on a contract basis so once the contract ends you are left with no
job
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,working with small businesses helps us to gain work experience and make us more confident in our field.
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 to gaining ,experience these setups have flexibility in their
job
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.We can work either part-time or full-time based on our availability.
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, graduates after their studies if they want to study
further
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 and save some money
this
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 is a great opportunity.
To conclude
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,
although
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 working in a large industry provides good income and
benefits
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 I am more in support of working for the small sector because it helps us to become more responsible and
for
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 its flexibility of working hours.
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Task Achievement
Provide a clearer opinion and position in the introduction and conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects back to the main argument.
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