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the chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status

the chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status
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A glance at the graph provided reveals information about how the amount of spare
time
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 was spent by males and females of five categories of employment status between 1998 and 1999. As can be clearly seen from the bar chart
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men enjoyed more
hours
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 of free
time
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 during a week than women in three out of five categories.
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,there were two statuses in which females were more
actively
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than males
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part-
time
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 employed and housewives. Gentlemen who were in a full-
time
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 employment class consumed more free
time
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 than ladies,with approximately 50
hours
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 each week,compared to around 38
hours
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 for girls. It is evident that
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population
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the population
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 of both genders who are unemployed and retired experienced the most
time
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 of
breaktime
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break time
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.There
was
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 the same results in two classifications for pensioner gentlemen and ladies and jobless just about 85 and 78
hours
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 of rest
time
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 during a period of seven days respectively. There were two groups where there is only information about women who were housekeepers and part-
time
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 employed utilized to about 50
hours
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 and less than 40
hours
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 respectively. In these
classes
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 there is no data given about men
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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