the chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status
A glance at the graph provided reveals information about how the amount of spare
time
was spent by males and females of five categories of employment status between 1998 and 1999.
As can be clearly seen from the bar chart that
men enjoyed more Correct pronoun usage
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hours
of free time
during a week than women in three out of five categories. However
,there were two statuses in which females were more actively
than males Replace the word
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time
employed and housewives.
Gentlemen who were in a full-time
employment class consumed more free time
than ladies,with approximately 50 hours
each week,compared to around 38 hours
for girls. It is evident that,
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population
of both genders who are unemployed and retired experienced the most Add an article
the population
time
of breaktime
.There Correct your spelling
break time
was
the same results in two classifications for pensioner gentlemen and ladies and jobless just about 85 and 78 Change the verb form
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hours
of rest time
during a period of seven days respectively.
There were two groups where there is only information about women who were housekeepers and part-time
employed utilized to about 50 hours
and less than 40 hours
respectively. In these classes
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