The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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The figures illustrate the present centre of Isilp that
this
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small town has planned to develop in the future.
Overall
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, residential areas, community facilities, and infrastructure will be expanded and made up for service people in the area. In the present, in the north, there are many lots of shops on both sides of the main
road
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which one side of the shops is close to the countryside and the other side is next to the housing area. The housing area is wide and has a
park
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the southeast. The main
road
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has two alleys that are on the west and the east of the residential. The west
road
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can lead to a school to the southwest which dead end to another group of housing.
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the planned development, it can be seen that the new main
road
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will be built in a circle shape in order to be accessible to all establishments. The shop zone in the north will have areas for a bus station and a car
park
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.
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, new housing will be constructed next to the car
park
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with the entrance connecting to the main
road
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. The old main
road
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will be replaced by a new walk for pedestrians only. The
park
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will be diminished in size and,
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the school will be a little bit renovated.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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