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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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it is clear that
 most mankind
spend
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the
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 huge part of their life in their occupation place so,
job
 pleasure is a decisive factor to increase personal happiness. in
this
 essay, I intend to say the parameters of rising
job
satisfaction
 by a lovely manager or a good wage .
moreover
, it seems to me
this
 prospect is not realistic for all employees.
firstly
 , many commentators justifiably argue that there are several decisive factors that the
amount
 of
worker
 well-being is able to rise at the workplace. first of all, The main element of
job
satisfaction
 is the manager's behaviour with the employees. if the employer is an ethical person, the gladness of members of the workforce is highly likely to increase significantly because in that suppose usually the stress of
worker
 decline.
secondly
, salary is another important factor for all employers.
it is clear that
 the
amount
 of wage is a fundamental element to remain of
worker
satisfaction
 at a high level.
for example
, if a
worker
 has a good wage, the ability of them to buy everything will stay upper than the standard of living.
on the other hand
, It doesn't seem logical that all staff members remain satisfied. From a social perspective, In any company, there are several departments that have different salaries. it is
also
 maintained that
difficulty
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amount
 of every position is different so the boss is unable to avoid different wages or exactly the quantity of comfort equally for all workers.
As a result
, there are always people who are not satisfied with their jobs. in conclusion, it seems to me, the
amount
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 of salaries and managers functioning are decisive factors in
growing
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 stage of
job
satisfaction
while
 it is not stable for all staff.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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