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Many employers believe that good social skills are as important as good professional qualifications for job success, so they hire people with good social skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, as we see a lot of
people
 focus on studying new
skills
 online,
hence
, all these Social
skills
 are required for job success, Personally I agree that
,
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 Social
skills
 are more important in the modern era,
therefore
, I feel
this
 way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay I firmly believe that, how much important for
people
studying
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to study
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 new social
skills
,
by
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through
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 self-education,
due to
this
 fast world, we find many companies hiring
people
By
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On
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 their
Skills
 without looking for their diploma or professional qualifications,
for instance
, my friend start a new job only by the
skills
 he expertise, like
photoshootp
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photoshoots
photoshoot
, aftereffect and Microsoft excel with a respectable salary,
as a consequence
, other
people
 disagree with that, say, all those new employers should have a high qualifications diploma in any type of work they looking for,
moreover
, in the
,
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university if you want to be an info graphist you need to study at least 3 years
then
 you can study masters degree,
in addition
, to finish
this
 course,
then
 you can start searching for a good job,
for example
, my sister study proclamations for 4 years,
as well as
,
then
 worked in Microsoft company, in conclusion, as I mentioned
firstly
, personally I believe that
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 everyone with a high level of social
skills
, can work easily in the biggest companies, Because, nowadays all corporate eras require
skills
 more than a professional diploma, Personally I believe that strongly that supporting my point of view.
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