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In your opinion, what incentives could be offered that would persuade more people to embrace electric cars? support your answer with reaasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience?

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Nowadays global warming and
environment
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 preservation have become the main topics for most
of
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countries
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 on our planet. Decreasing CO2 emissions and eliminating carbon footage
are
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the
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urgent issue for all kinds of industries including car manufacturers to achieve the global zero emission goal which will be implemented in
2030s
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.
To begin
 with, compared to the internal combustion engine, electric motors are
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 incredible power source which not only
have
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greatly
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 higher energy transmission rate but
also
deliver
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 a better acceleration performance.
For instance
, when people drive on a downward slope
on
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 an electric vehicle, residual energy can be recycled back to its battery and
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reused for
the
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further
 route that
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conventional cars with
internal
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 combustion
engine
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 can not do.
However
, it
also
 can be observed that some countries or areas are still not ready to provide enough capacity of
infrasturcture
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infrastructure
 for electric transportation. Finding a recharge service in the crowded downtown area has been an annoying issue for those who
has
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 owned an electric vehicle.
Besides
, building enough generation plant of defined kinds of renewable energy is
also
 a compelling problem
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 the government need to deal with.
Furthermore
,
high
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 trading tax rate combined
into
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 the total price of electric cars is
also
 an obvious issue for
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potential consumers. Generally, from my
perspective
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 a better
infrasturcture
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infrastructure
 for recharging electric vehicles and a decent tax reduction are the effective way to convince people to
trasfer
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transfer
 to electric
tranportation
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transportation
 and the new technologies on it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax incentives
  • rebates
  • charging infrastructure
  • consumer confidence
  • battery technology
  • range anxiety
  • awareness campaigns
  • misconceptions
  • environmental benefits
  • corporate partnerships
  • employee benefits
  • lease
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