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The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles* between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. * vehicles that use both fuel and electricity

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles* between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. * vehicles that use both fuel and electricity
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The bar chart shows data on the worldwide
sales
 of transport, which uses both fuel and electricity from 2006 to 2009.
According to
 the
,
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diagram
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 it is clear, that hybrid vehicles became very popular in Japan
through out
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 the
years
. As can be seen in
the
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2006
this
 type of transport was at its lowest point just about 50,000
sales
. For the next two
years
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 the
number
 of
sales
 was gradually increasing and reached a little more than 100,000 items. In 2009 there was a rapid increase in
sales
 of hybrid machines and the total
number
 of
sales
 tripled
in
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this
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 year. For the US, the first two
years
 showed an upward trend. Between 2006 and 2007
years
sales
 increased from 2500,000 to 350,000.
However
,
sales
 were gradually decreasing during the next
years
 and in 2009 the total
number
 of
sales
 was approximately 290,000. Other countries did not have any fluctuation,
sales
 were growing up all time and in 2009 they reached 110,000 in total. Even with the decrease in
sales
 between 2007 and 2009 in the US, the total
number
 of
sales
 from all countries almost doubled and reached the
number
 of 740,000
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, years, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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