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The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles* between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. * vehicles that use both fuel and electricity

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The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles* between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. * vehicles that use both fuel and electricity
The bar chart shows data on the worldwide
sales
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 of transport, which uses both fuel and electricity from 2006 to 2009.
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diagram
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 it is clear, that hybrid vehicles became very popular in Japan
through out
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 the
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. As can be seen in
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2006
this
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 type of transport was at its lowest point just about 50,000
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. For the next two
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years
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 the
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 of
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 was gradually increasing and reached a little more than 100,000 items. In 2009 there was a rapid increase in
sales
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 of hybrid machines and the total
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 of
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 tripled
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 year. For the US, the first two
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 showed an upward trend. Between 2006 and 2007
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sales
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 increased from 2500,000 to 350,000.
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,
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 were gradually decreasing during the next
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 and in 2009 the total
number
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 of
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 was approximately 290,000. Other countries did not have any fluctuation,
sales
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 were growing up all time and in 2009 they reached 110,000 in total. Even with the decrease in
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 between 2007 and 2009 in the US, the total
number
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 of
sales
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 from all countries almost doubled and reached the
number
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 of 740,000

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, years, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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