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The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China. Summarise the differences and comaprisons.

The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China. Summarise the differences and comaprisons.
The given chart illustrates the
number
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 of private cars per thousand people in China from 1987 to 1999.
Overall
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, it is true that the
number
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 of vehicle ownerships in China showed an increasing trend.
However
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, the degree of increase was different from year to year. Taking a closer look at the graph, one can see that vehicle ownership had the smallest
number
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 of 250 in 1987, but it surged to 4100 in 1999.
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, it rose by 1000 from 950 in 1993 to 1950 in 1995, and it was the same increase as from 1950 in 1995 to 2950 in 1997.
In addition
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, the
number
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 of private vehicles increased relatively slightly from 250 in 1987 to 500 in 1989.
In contrast
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, the figure for vehicle ownership had similar numbers in 1991 and 1993, 800 and 950, respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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