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The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table chart illustrates how much of the average family's household income is in the city of UK, and the pie chart presents the percentage of expenditures spent on
food
 and
clothes
 by the average family between 2010 and 2013.
Overall
, in spite of the fact that average income underwent a significant decrease, spending on
food
 and
clothes
 witnessed a slight increase, with most of the total being spent on meat and fish, fruits and vegetables. Between 2010 and 2013 an average British family's income saw a significant decrease, from 29000 to 25000.
While
 spending on
food
 and
clothes
 experienced a slight increase of 1000, from 14000 to 15000.
According to
 the pie chart, the percentage of expenditures spent on meat and fish, and
clothes
 witnessed a noticeably decreased to 23% and 13%, respectively.
On the other hand
, people seemed to spend more money on fruits and vegetables, and dairy products, as the figures respectively went up to 30% and 16%. Meanwhile, people's spending on other
food
 remains stable at exactly 18%.
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