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Many people believe that good social skills are important as good qualifications to succeed in a job, so they are employing people who are with good social skills To what extent do you agree/disagree?

Many people believe that good social skills are important as good qualifications to succeed in a job, so they are employing people who are with good social skills To what extent do you agree/disagree?
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Many employers believe that an outstanding ability to easily connect with people plays a vital role in the workspace. In my opinion, there are two sides and I will outline the reasons in the following essay. First of all, firms are always trying to make their business profitable and social
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 are required for negotiating.
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, those who are succeeded in communication may have a beneficial impact on the company. Especially, personal characteristics namely persuasive, easygoing, and communicative can affect all the relationships aspects with partners, and stakeholders.
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 consumers are more satisfied with the services and are likely to buy their products.
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, well-developed social
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 contribute to internal team relations and enhance
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 work effectiveness.
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, if an emergency happens, only through an internal communication system, colleagues can inform each other fast, in order for problems to be carried out effectively. On the other side, I would agree that only social
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 can not be a factor to employ people. It is mainly because there are several jobs that do not ask for soft
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 rather than technical capabilities. Based on work ethics companies have no right to reject candidates who have social anxiety.
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 some engineering jobs are asking for knowledge in the field and operation system
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, which is important for the whole process and it allows one to have lower communication
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, everyone deserves to be considered equally and companies should hire people who meet exactly their main requirements and go through all the steps
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 I believe that both sides have merits,
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 everyone has to be treated equally and employed
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