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The chart below gives information about the production of oil daily in 4 nations between 2000 to 2004

The chart below gives information about the production of oil daily in 4 nations between 2000 to 2004
The chart below gives information about the
production
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 of
oil
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 daily in 4 nations between 2000 to 2004
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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while
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 the figure
of
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for
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oil
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production
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 in
3
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the 3
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countries tended to increase , the opposite was true for Congo.
Additionally
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, the
oil
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production
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 in Chad saw a significant rose in 2003 and 2004 after Chad did not
product
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produce
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 in 3 years Out of 4 countries in 2000, the
oil
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production
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 in Congo was the highest at 275000, and Nigeria at 205.000.
However
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, the figure
of
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for
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oil
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production
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 in Chad has not
produced
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been produced
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 in 3 years and stayed unchanged. Meanwhile, that of Somalia was 5.000 It can be seen that the year 2003 and 2004 witnessed a significant increase from 8.000 to 50000. That of Somalia
also
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 rose at 50000.
While
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 Nigeria was higher than other countries and stood at 213.000, that of Congo was 203.00

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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