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Some governments spend a lot of money on exploring space. Some feel that this investment is justified while other think that money should be spent on public services like healthcare and education.

#governments #money #space #feel #investment #services #healthcare #education
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human has
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 interest in exploring
space
 even governments are
also
 supporting
such
exploration
 by funding them.
however
, it is a matter of discord as some people think
this
as
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 a positive step
while
 others opposed it by saying that
this
 money should be invested in
public
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 interest.
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views with my point of view. commencing with the most prominent reason why people argue
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 investment in
space
exploration
, is
becausse
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because
 it
enhanceed
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enhanced
enhances
 the scope of science.
in other words
, folks now have more knowledge of outer
space
then
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 in the past and
better
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a better
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 understanding of our galaxy.
for example
, in the
last
 40
years
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 humans have developed and discovered the unknown facts and places of our universe. it can not be possible without the support of the government and its resources.
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 a result,
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mankind gets benefits by understanding the
scientific
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science
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 happening in
the
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space
. despite the given arguments, others including
I
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 assert that
this
 money should be utilized in public welfare schemes.
space
exploration
 becomes a race between nations in
present
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 time as every country wants to dominate
in
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space
exploration
 missions. to do so they spend
huge
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amount
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 on
such
 programmes neglecting the basic needs of society.
for example
, even a single rocket launch in
lower
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 orbit costs more than 50 million
dollers
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dollars
. developing nations will not get enough benefits from investments in
space
 programmes. in spite of
this
, they can improve their medical facilities
as well as
education
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their education
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 system to grow in a better and fast way. in conclusion,
however
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space
explorationn
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exploration
explorations
 improves our understanding
about
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our
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outer
space
 yet
orr
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or
 growing nations it is not worth spending as they have other primary issues to resolve.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • potential solutions
  • climate monitoring
  • disaster prediction
  • satellite communication
  • fostering international cooperation
  • improving the quality of life
  • reducing poverty
  • addressing immediate societal needs
  • allocating funds
  • advancements in space technology
  • long-term benefits
  • robust public services
  • partnerships with private companies
  • cost-sharing
  • preparing for future challenges
  • resource scarcity
  • present-day issues
  • affects daily life directly
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