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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In modern times, it is extremely important to pay attention
on
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 how your staff is dressed,
this
 is because the appearance of your
employees
 gives the first impression on your customers. In
this
 essay, I am going to talk about both sides and give my own opinion. First of all,
well dressed
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 staff represents how good their company is.
Moreover
, people like to see all of the
workers
 of a specific corporation in
same
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 dress code. Because it would be easier for people to understand who is the part of the
workers
 and who is not. In my opinion, another crucial factor is that
while
workers
 are in a
work
 form, they are concentrated on their
work
 and it makes them more organized. Having said that, dress code is not the most integral part
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employees
, as long as they do all of the tasks, which they were asked to accomplish. Until they
are delivering
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 a good working output
at the end
 of the
work
 day, the
clothe
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clothes
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, which they wear
losses
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its
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their
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impotency
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importance
.
Furthermore
,
dress
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 codes of some organisations may be embarrassing or uncomfortable for their
workers
, which may
also
 lead to
the
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problems.
To conclude
, from my
perspective
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employees
 ought to have an opportunity of choosing their own
work
 uniform
by
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 their own.
However
, they should wear something formal in order to avoid some miss
understandings
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understanding
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 between the
employees
 and the customers.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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