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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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In modern times, it is extremely important to pay attention
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 how your staff is dressed,
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 is because the appearance of your
employees
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 gives the first impression on your customers. In
this
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 essay, I am going to talk about both sides and give my own opinion. First of all,
well dressed
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 staff represents how good their company is.
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, people like to see all of the
workers
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 of a specific corporation in
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 dress code. Because it would be easier for people to understand who is the part of the
workers
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 and who is not. In my opinion, another crucial factor is that
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workers
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 are in a
work
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 form, they are concentrated on their
work
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 and it makes them more organized. Having said that, dress code is not the most integral part
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employees
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, as long as they do all of the tasks, which they were asked to accomplish. Until they
are delivering
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 a good working output
at the end
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 of the
work
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 day, the
clothe
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clothes
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, which they wear
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its
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their
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impotency
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importance
.
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,
dress
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the dress
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 codes of some organisations may be embarrassing or uncomfortable for their
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, which may
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 lead to
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problems.
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, from my
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employees
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 ought to have an opportunity of choosing their own
work
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 uniform
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 their own.
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, they should wear something formal in order to avoid some miss
understandings
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 between the
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 and the customers.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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