The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The two pie charts illustrate the percentages of
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university
students
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who can use other languages
besides
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English in two different
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. In general, it can be clearly seen that there was a rise in the proportion of
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and
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language
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speakers over a period of 10
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and the majority of
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students
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could speak at least one foreign
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in
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both
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.
According to
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the charts, the proportion of
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students
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who spoke a
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and third
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was 80%,
whereas
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those who spoke only English accounted for only 20% in 2000. After 10
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, the percentage of
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language
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speakers rose slightly by 5% from 70% to 70% and from 10% to 15% respectively. Spanish was the most common
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language
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spoken by the
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in
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both
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, accounting for 30% in 2000 to 35% in 2010.
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, the proportion of
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students
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who spoke a
second
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language
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apart from French, German,
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rose gently from 15% in 2000 to 20% in 2010.
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the percentage of Brutish
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who spoke French indicated a decline
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5% in 2010, there was a period of stability at 10% in the number of German speakers over the 10-year period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words british, students, years, second, language with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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