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Percent of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

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The pie charts illustrate data about the proportion of
water
 used for various
occasion
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occasions
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 likely- industrial
use
,
agriculture
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agricultural
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use
, and domestic
use
 in terms of six different zone categories of the planet. In general, it can be seen that
the
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agricultural
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agriculture
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 is the largest consumer of
water
 in South
America
, Africa, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
,
while
 Industrial consumes more
water
 than other sectors in North
America
 and Europe. It can be clearly seen from the chart, the proportion of
water
is
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used by agriculture in Central
Asia
, Africa, and South East
Asia
, at 88 %, 84 %, and 81 % respectively.
In south
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South
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America
 uses proportionally less agricultural
water
 than
three
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the three
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 areas mentioned above.
However
, it has the greatest percentage of residential
water
use
of
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in
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 six areas, at 19
percent
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per cent
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On the other hand
,
in
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North
America
 and Europe
use
 a proportion of industrial roughly half of the
overall
water
 consumption which is more than
other zone
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another zone
other zones
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.
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