The line graph gives information in proportions about the changing pattern of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.There are 4 indicators CD player,Mobile phone,Home computer and Interner access.

The line graph gives information in proportions about the changing pattern of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.There are 4 indicators  CD player,Mobile phone,Home computer and Interner access.
The line graph gives information in
proportions
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about the changing pattern of domestic
access
to modern technology in homes in the UK.There are 4 indicators CD player,Mobile phone,Home computer and
Interner
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Internet
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access
, broadly speaking it can be clearly seen that all of the lines had a growth. At the beginning it is
evidently
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that
CD
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player
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players
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had the highest percentage,
furthermore
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over the years it was only climbing gradually and reached approximately 80%.
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the internet
access
had the lowest percentage
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it is important to notice that the internet
access
started later than the other ones
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it had only rocketed considerably and doubled from 20% to around 40%.There
is
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also
lines of the home computer and the mobile phone.The percentage of home
computer
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had a
steadily
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rise
although
at the end
it
falled
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from
the
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second place to
the
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third.The mobile phone had a rapid increase through the years and jumped from
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last
place in 1996 to
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second place in 2003 with about 70%.
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