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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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in these pie charts, we intend to compare the ability of
students
 who were able to talk in other languages except English in 2000 and 2010 at one of the universities in the UK.
it is clear that
 the highest number of
students
 who could talk in other languages belonged to Spanish speech
although
 the minimal of them could converse
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in
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 the German language.
moreover
, these pie charts illustrate the number of
students
 who speak no other language declined significantly during
this
 period.
according to
 that, in 2010, there was a marginal rise among
students
 who were able to talk only Spanish
so that
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,
this
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so this
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 amount stood at just about 35%.
also
, these statistics show that the number of
students
 who were able to talk with other one and two other languages increase
5
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% in both of them. so these figures stood at about 20% and 15% respectively in 2010.
in addition
, the figure of
them
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 who did not able to talk in any language go down rapidly from 20% to 10% between 2000 and 2010.
moreover
,
moreover
, there was a decline
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 5% in 2010 for the
students
 who were able to speak
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French. And
finally
, the total of
students
 who could speak German was 10% in both years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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