The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of free
time
per week
both for men and women
in five categories
of employment status from 1998 to 1999. Overall
, It is clear that
men enjoyed more hours
of leisure
time
per week
than women
in three out of five categories
. However
, only figures for women
are shown in two categories
, namely employed part-time
and housewives. Among the full-time
employed people, obviously
men had slightly more Add a comma
obviously,
leisure
time
than women
, with approximately 45 hours
of free time
per week
, compared to around 38 hours
for women
. Obviously, unemployed and retired people had the longest period of leisure
activity of both genders. Moreover
, the figures for retired males and females were exactly the same as those for the unemployed, at around 85 and 78 hours
of free time
per week
, respectively. Housewives enjoyed 50 hours
of spare time
, a little more than part-time
and full-time
working women
who had just over 40 and 38 leisure
hours
each week
, respectively but less than the unemployed and retired women
. No data gave
for employed and housewives of these Wrong verb form
was given
categories
. 183 words.Submitted by ssirirat on
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