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The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011

The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011
The twin pie charts illustrate the expense of
household
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 necessities in China in the year 1995
along with
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 2011.
This
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 is based on four parameters namely food, clothing, medicine and
household
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 goods. The budget for food is highest in 1995 at sixty-eight per
cent
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,
whereas
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 the expenditure on medicine is the lowest at four per
cent
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 only. Though significantly less, edible is followed by clothing with an allocation of only nineteen per
cent
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,
while
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 nine per
cent
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 is the allocation to other
household
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 goods.
This
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 budget has undergone notable changes over sixteen years. In 2011, the expense of meals was minimised by nine per
cent
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 and it became fifty-nine per
cent
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, but on ,medicines it hiked by seven per
cent
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. The new expenditure on medicine is eleven per
cent
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 of the total expense. The budget for clothing remained almost the same i.e., 19%,
however
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 for other
household
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 goods it rose by three per
cent
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 and became 12%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, cent with synonyms.
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