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Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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So
people
 believe that it is better to
work
 independently than to
work
 with a group of
people
 on a project. In my ,opinion working
together with
 a group of
people
 yields better results than working alone,the reasons for which I derive my opinion will be
further
 discussed extensively. Working alone gives one the option of privacy,it brings out the individual's innermost desire to succeed and the person is free to
work
 at his own pace without interference from others but there
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some downsides to
this
 because there it's prone to so many mistakes.
Also
 working alone removes unnecessary strife, when one does a contract alone he won't spend any time arguing with someone on how or when it should be accomplished Working with others, on the other ,hand yields more positive results especially when it comes to school projects.
This
 is because when different
people
 come
together with
 one goal in mind,there would be varieties of ideas which will in turn lead to a greater achievement of the goal when the ideas are pooled together. Another reason is
people
 develop the habit of co-existing with others which will help them in their future workplace ,,
Furthermore
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 it removes unhealthy competition between humans as they will all concentrate on bringing success to their assignment. In ,conclusion working as a group benefits
people
 and promotes better relationships more than when
people
work
 on their own.
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