Directors of large companies often receive much bigger salary increases than ordinary workers. Employers´ organizations say that in a global market this is necessary to attract the best management talent. What are your views?

Oregon University made a study where
they
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confirmed that the main problem between
workers
and
directors
in companies is the salaries. Every single
company
should pay the same salary to every worker whether it is an employee or a director. Sometimes the
directors
use their power to put themselves above
workers
, forcing them to do extra hours without payment and very stressful jobs. Especially in Mexico
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we can see a lot of
this
behavior
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in companies, usually because the actual
directors
are former employees. They want to do the exact same attitude that their
directors
had with them when they were younger, so they repeat
this
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and it becomes an infinite cycle.
This
is why
the
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people in the same
company
should earn the same amount of money for the same hours that the person
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working.
This
will prevent
misbehaviors
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and problems between
workers
and
directors
. As well
everyone
will have the same lifestyle so nobody will feel jealous
over
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the other
workers
.
This
decision needs to be made by the CEO of the
company
, so
everyone
is on the same page. Other people may believe that there needs to be a little gap between positions
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because
everyone
is doing different things,
however
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everyone
needs to be on the same page. In conclusion one of the most important things in a
company
is the environment, it's essential to keep it
on
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the right spot, so no one feels less than others.
This
is the main reason why the
workers
and
directors
should win the same amount of money.
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