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Directors of large companies often receive much bigger salary increases than ordinary workers. Employers´ organizations say that in a global market this is necessary to attract the best management talent. What are your views?

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Oregon University made a study where
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 confirmed that the main problem between
workers
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 and
directors
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 in companies is the salaries. Every single
company
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 should pay the same salary to every worker whether it is an employee or a director. Sometimes the
directors
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 use their power to put themselves above
workers
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, forcing them to do extra hours without payment and very stressful jobs. Especially in Mexico
City
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 we can see a lot of
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behavior
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 in companies, usually because the actual
directors
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 are former employees. They want to do the exact same attitude that their
directors
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 had with them when they were younger, so they repeat
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behavior
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 and it becomes an infinite cycle.
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 is why
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people in the same
company
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 should earn the same amount of money for the same hours that the person
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working.
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 will prevent
misbehaviors
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 and problems between
workers
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 and
directors
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. As well
everyone
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 will have the same lifestyle so nobody will feel jealous
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 the other
workers
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.
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 decision needs to be made by the CEO of the
company
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, so
everyone
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 is on the same page. Other people may believe that there needs to be a little gap between positions
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 because
everyone
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 is doing different things,
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however
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everyone
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 needs to be on the same page. In conclusion one of the most important things in a
company
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 is the environment, it's essential to keep it
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 the right spot, so no one feels less than others.
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 is the main reason why the
workers
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 and
directors
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 should win the same amount of money.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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