The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph presents the global sales of four types of digital
games
, including mobile phone
games
, online
games
, console
games
, and handheld
games
, from 2000 to 2006.
Overall
, it can be seen that console
games
had a decreasing figure,
while
the other three
games
presented an upward trend.
According to
the data, handheld
games
were making the highest number
compare
Change the form of the verb
compared
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to the others,
started
Wrong verb form
starting
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with nearly 12
billion
dollars
in 2000,
then
, slightly
increased
Wrong verb form
increasing
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and
reached
Wrong verb form
reaching
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almost 18
billion
dollars
in 2006.
Whereas
console
games
slowly decreased from around 6 million
dollars
to nearly half in 2006.
Additionally
, online
games
and mobile phone
games
presented the same trend in 2002. After that, these two figures made
the
Correct article usage
apply
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global sales at about 4 to 5
billion
dollars
in 2004.
However
, in 2006, online
games
finally
exceeded mobile phone
games
by
reached
Wrong verb form
reaching
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the
Correct article usage
a
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peak
at
Change preposition
of
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around 9 to 12
billion
dollars
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words games, billion, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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