The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph presents the global sales of four types of digital
games
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, including mobile phone
games
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, online
games
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, console
games
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, and handheld
games
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, from 2000 to 2006.
Overall
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, it can be seen that console
games
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had a decreasing figure,
while
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the other three
games
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presented an upward trend.
According to
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the data, handheld
games
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were making the highest number
compare
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to the others,
started
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with nearly 12
billion
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dollars
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in 2000,
then
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, slightly
increased
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increasing
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and
reached
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almost 18
billion
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dollars
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in 2006.
Whereas
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console
games
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slowly decreased from around 6 million
dollars
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to nearly half in 2006.
Additionally
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, online
games
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and mobile phone
games
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presented the same trend in 2002. After that, these two figures made
the
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global sales at about 4 to 5
billion
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dollars
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in 2004.
However
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, in 2006, online
games
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finally
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exceeded mobile phone
games
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by
reached
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reaching
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the
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a
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peak
at
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of
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around 9 to 12
billion
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dollars
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words games, billion, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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