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Students in university education should develop specialists in one subject are rather than create a border range of subjects. To what extend do you agree or disagree

#students #university #education #specialists #border #range #subjects
Pupils in
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university education
emphasiye
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emphasize
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to develop
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specialist
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specialists
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 in one
subject
 rather than
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 various range of
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subjects
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subject
.
This
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 of studying numerous
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subjects
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 or
single
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subject
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. I firmly agree with the
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stastement
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statement
 To commence with
thursday
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student
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students
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 are opting for
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a single
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single stream
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subject
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. To be clearer, the
children
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single
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subject
this
 can help the
children
 to learn the particular
subject
 thoroughly and to be
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through
this
 the
children
 can get into a job easily without any hurdles.
For instance
,
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most of the
subject
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 to learn because nowadays
the
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children
 are looking for the new job to
enroll
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 Yet another point to be noted is that
,
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 the student engaging in single stream tends to be more flexible and
also
 they
accquire
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acquire
 the
course
 at
affordable
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 rate.
For instance
,
the
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children
 in universities are doing
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part time
parttime
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a partime
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partime
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part-time
 job with
the
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their
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 studies
this
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which
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 help them to attain
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practical
pratical
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practical
 experience surprisingly, the
children
 engage in
these
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this course
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course
 to spend their lecture time more productively
for
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developing
devolping
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developing
 new skill
However
, if
student
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students
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learn
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 various
subject
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 in their academic period. There is
chance
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 for the pupils to
enroll
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for
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 the new
course
according to
 their
wish
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Moreover
, the
children
 learning these
subject
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 has
a
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children
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children
 has
a
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 ocean of opportunities
infront
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in front
 of them.
Apart from
this
, students can pass the
course
 with
a
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good merit because of the
overall
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To sum up
,
although
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different
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subject
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 is good, I believe that single stream
subject
 is more feasible and
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convenient
convinent
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convenient
 to learn
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