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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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A lot of counties in the world find
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tourism
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tourism
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 decisive effect if it is not
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Tourism
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country
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,
hence
, the advantages outweigh the drawbacks.
This
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tourism
. Beginning with the positive aspects,
tourism
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 the opportunity
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 cultural exchange and
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 to make a
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 money.
Tourism
 places which do not require much investment, like historical buildings and natural science are came to make a
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 money and
also
 they do not claim much money, as it is unnecessary
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 to the rebuild and mounting. The influx of tourists contributes to boosting the nation`s economy as funds collected through travellers are later used in modifying the infrastructure of
tourists
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 hotspots.
For instance
, it is clearly evident how Thailand and Maldives are earning predominantly through the travel sector.
Furthermore
,
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 exchange can fix the international relations between countries.
Also
, countries with good
tourism
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clear credibility in front of other countries. It is another benefit
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 if include that trades across nations become smooth and lucrative.
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, the northern of Pakistan
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 recently become popular
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 for international holidaymakers because of
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 the region observed a significant increase in its exports.
Nevertheless
,
tourism
 is problematic for the destruction of nature and habitat loss. It is undeniable that the development of the travel industry interfered with nature. In fact, tourist attractions require unspoiled land to construct and develop.
For instance
, they have to occupy new areas in order to build hotels,
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, especially enormous resorts.
Therefore
, the habitat of another species shrinks and compresses to a small number. In
this
 sense, some animals have to move to new natural land to settle.
Moreover
, the worst case is that they could lose their lives in conflict to protect their territory and contribute to the cost of nature. In conclusion, I would give credence that
although
tourism
 may have some problems, it has had a massive economic impact throughout the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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