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Some people say that playing computer games is bad for children in every aspect. Others say that playing computer games can have positive effects on the way children develop. Discuss both vies and give your opinion.

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some that
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games
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 have negative effects on
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 in so many different ways, others think that playing
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games
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 on the computer is able to get benefits
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children
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's development. In my opinion, I think
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video
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games
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 have so many drawbacks. On the one hand, playing
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games
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 in front of the screen may strongly affect their vision level.
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, the screen is releasing
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 kinds of lights that may damage the eyes in a direct way, blue lights,
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, especially if these
children
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 are playing for long hours facing the display.
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,
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games
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 can easily lead to addiction, which will affect the
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's performance in school or inside the house towards their parents.
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,
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 can improve the ability to think of
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.
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, some
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games
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 require using the brain to solve the game
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 as puzzle
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 or mysterious
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 which may help them do their daily live tasks. In my opinion,
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games
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 generally are not a good option for people, especially
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. the time they will spend on the display playing
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, it would be better if they use it to develop their personality.
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, avoiding computer
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 may increase the chance to aim at reading books and get more attention on their school duties.
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, people may vary their opinions about computer
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. I believe that if
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 are banned,
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 will give
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children
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 the opportunity to develop their selves.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Addiction
  • Academic performance
  • Social interactions
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Obesity
  • Desensitize
  • Cognitive development
  • Problem-solving
  • Hand-eye coordination
  • Multiplayer games
  • Social interaction
  • Teamwork
  • Moderation
  • Proper guidance
  • Monitor
  • Time limits
  • Balanced approach
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