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Some people say that playing computer games is bad for children in every aspect. Others say that playing computer games can have positive effects on the way children develop. Discuss both vies and give your opinion.

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some that
video
games
 have negative effects on
children
 in so many different ways, others think that playing
video
games
 on the computer is able to get benefits
on
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children
's development. In my opinion, I think
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video
games
 have so many drawbacks. On the one hand, playing
video
games
 in front of the screen may strongly affect their vision level.
In other words
, the screen is releasing
such
 kinds of lights that may damage the eyes in a direct way, blue lights,
for example
, especially if these
children
 are playing for long hours facing the display.
In addition
,
video
games
 can easily lead to addiction, which will affect the
children
's performance in school or inside the house towards their parents.
On the other hand
,
games
 can improve the ability to think of
children
.
For instance
, some
video
games
 require using the brain to solve the game
such
 as puzzle
games
 or mysterious
games
 which may help them do their daily live tasks. In my opinion,
video
games
 generally are not a good option for people, especially
children
. the time they will spend on the display playing
games
, it would be better if they use it to develop their personality.
Furthermore
, avoiding computer
games
 may increase the chance to aim at reading books and get more attention on their school duties.
To sum up
, people may vary their opinions about computer
games
. I believe that if
video
games
 are banned,
this
 will give
the
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children
 the opportunity to develop their selves.
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