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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.
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The given line graph demonstrates U.S. energy consumption by six types of fuel between 1980 and 2030 . Looking from an
overall
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 perspective , it is evident that petrol and oil , coal and natural gas
the
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 most used in
this
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 country .
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 , the other fuels have
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 and are expected to continue rising with the exception of hydropower which will remain stable over the period . Petrol and oil consumption stood at 35
quadrillion
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 units in 1980 before a slight dip with minor fluctuations around 33
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quadrillion
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 until approximately 2000 . From that point on , a steadier rise begins
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 anticipated to reach nearly 50
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quadrillion
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 by 2030 . The second petrol is coal . There was
not
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 change in 1990 and there was
sharp
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 increase to 16
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quadrillion
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 in the prediction year . Natural gas is higher than coal in the first year . After , some oscillation it fell gradually to coal .
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 , three fuels
was
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 started
the
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 same place . The use of nuclear power stood at 4
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quadrillion
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, before a marginal jump with
small
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 fluctuation around 7
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 end of the year . Solar stayed just under
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5
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.
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 , the
last
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 is hydropower , there was registered
stable
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 in 2030 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quadrillion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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