The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
chart illustrates the variety of pastime activities, which retired people from the United States enjoyed doing from 1980 to 2010.
First,
we can see that the number of elderly individuals, who enjoy hiking was growing all the time and know it is the most popular way to spend
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time among those people. We can connect
this
tendency with the desire of senior humans to be healthy and to keep fit.
Also
, we can see watching TV
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high
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a high
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position on
this
graph, approximately 65
percent
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of retired citizens
prefers
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it to any other activities.
Moreover
, reading and surfing the internet
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now almost
on
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the same
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.
However
, the situation with reading between 1980 and 2000 was completely different.
This
activity was gaining popularity from 1980 to 1990, but for some
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the situation changed right after 1990 and the number of people, who enjoyed books was low.
Then
, in 2000 it started rapidly growing and
this
tendency is continuing now. Actually, we can see, that theatre, which was one of the most beloved activities in 1980, now is the least common.
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