The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
chart illustrates the variety of pastime activities, which retired people from the United States enjoyed doing from 1980 to 2010.
First,
we can see that the number of elderly individuals, who enjoy hiking was growing all the time and know it is the most popular way to spend the
time among those people. We can connect Correct article usage
apply
this
tendency with the desire of senior humans to be healthy and to keep fit. Also
, we can see watching TV on
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position on Correct article usage
a high
this
graph, approximately 65 percent
of retired citizens Change the spelling
per cent
prefers
it to any other activities. Change the verb form
prefer
Moreover
, reading and surfing the internet is
now almost Correct subject-verb agreement
are
on
the same Change preposition
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positions
. Fix the agreement mistake
position
However
, the situation with reading between 1980 and 2000 was completely different. This
activity was gaining popularity from 1980 to 1990, but for some Fix the agreement mistake
reason
reasons
the situation changed right after 1990 and the number of people, who enjoyed books was low. Add a comma
,reasons
Then
, in 2000 it started rapidly growing and this
tendency is continuing now. Actually, we can see, that theatre, which was one of the most beloved activities in 1980, now is the least common.Submitted by kseniia2102 on
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