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In many countries, women are allowed to take maternity leave from their jobs during the first months after the birth of their babies. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In some countries,
women
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 are granted maternity leave from their workplace during the initial first
months
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child
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 essay agrees that the advantages
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 doing so outweigh the disadvantages.
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 is because the opportunity to opt for leave
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child
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childbirth
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birth
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 offers the
women
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 the needed rest to recover physically and
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 overcome mental health issues
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 as depression. A
woman
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 carries a
child
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 in her womb for 9 months during
pregnancy
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.
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woman
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's body undergoes several changes .
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 doctors around the world recommend
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woman
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to
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take appropriate nutrition and sleep after giving
birth
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, as it is only natural that the female body would start to return to
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pregnancy
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 conditions. For which getting adequate rest is essential which is
difficut
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difficult
 to achieve performing office work.
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, obtaining complete rest from
office
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 is highly
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effective
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birth
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 physical healing amongst
women
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. Pre and
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post
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pregnancy
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 involves many hormonal fluctuations in
women
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 which
effects
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 their mental well-being.
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, several medical records suggest that most
women
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 undergo depression
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child
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childbirth
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birth
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effecting
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 the mother and
new born
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newborn
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 relations.
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, having the provision to take leave
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post
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pregnancy
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 would enable the
woman
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 to have
the
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sufficient space and time to connect with their
child
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 and
develope
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develop
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new born
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newborn
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 requirements apart from working on improving her own mental issues. In conclusion,
women
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 who are allowed leave
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post
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child
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birth
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 mainly the first few months can utilize the leave period to heal physically and mentally.
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, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages in
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 case.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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