The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009
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The bar gives information about the proportion of expenditures for five major groups in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in 2009. It is important to note that the United States and the United Kingdom have the highest rate of housing. the percentage of housing in America was just above 25% which was the highest rate in comparison with other places
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as Britain which was just another 25%. In the Food section
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America was lower than Britain which was approxcemtly 21%.
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, in transportation and Health care the American percentage was above the Britan there were respectively just other 20% and 10%
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, with the United Kingdom which was 15% and well under 5%.
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, the Japanese have more than 20% in food compared with Canadians was 15%.
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, in Housing Canadians and Japanese are very close to each other both of them were nearly 20%.
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, Canada in transportation stood at 20% which was higher than the Japne was 10%. In health care part Canadian and Japanese are at the same rate and both of them were just under 5%.
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