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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures below given
depict
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 the growth of the
village
 of Ryemouth from 1995 to 2023 (present).
Overall
, over the period the
village
have
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has
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 witnessed spectacular alterations with the addition of apartments,
house
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a house
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 and a tennis court, which indicates a higher population.
To begin
 with 1995, it can be seen that in the north-east side of the
village
were
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was
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 located farmland and
forest
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a forest
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 park.
In
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On
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 the opposite
site
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side
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 in two parts of the road were situated 12 houses, 4 of
them
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which
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 were surrounded separately.
Also
, to the south part were constructed 5 shops and fish markets, which were divided by the road. To the
south-east
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southeast
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 side were located a hotel
,
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 and a café.
In
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On
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 the south coast of the
village
 worked a fishing port.
Furthermore
,
with
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in
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 the present, it is described that forest
park
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parks
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 and farmland have been removed and replaced
to
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with
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 golf and tennis court. In the
north-west
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northwest
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have
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appeared the new road and 3 more houses. Turning to the south part of the map, it can be noticed that restaurants and apartments have been constructed
instead
 of shops,
fish
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and fish
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 markets.
In
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On
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 the east side have built a car park and
fishing
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the fishing
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 port have been totally demolished. Café still stands in its place.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • key features
  • contrasting
  • developments
  • alterations
  • enhancements
  • infrastructure
  • recreational facilities
  • emerging
  • adaptation
  • population growth
  • connectivity
  • accessibility
  • preserve
  • aesthetics
  • analytically
  • livability
  • notable facilities
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