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some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same openion as them. Other people believe its good to have friends who some time disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own openion.

#people #friends #openion #time
Some
people
 feel that humans have
the
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 similar thought
is
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the best thing
being
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 friendship
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, on the other hand,
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on the other hand
 the rest of them think that
people
 have to get
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a friend
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friend
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friends
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 who
have
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absolutely
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an absolutely
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 opposite
opinion
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opinions
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with
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 them. In
this
 essay, I will argue being
friend
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friends
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whom
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who
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 have both the opposite and the same mind
people
 is the best thing. First of
all
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people
 should make a
friend
 for themselves
however
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, they should perfectly pay attention in
this
 situation. Nowadays, most
of
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people
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the people
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 want
to
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friends
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friend
 who have
same
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the same
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interest
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interests
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,
same
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and same
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ability
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abilities
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 and
it
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apply
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can be best all over the world.
Sometime
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people
 want to their
friend
have
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to absolutely agree
what
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with what
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 they are saying.
Likewise
, being
friend
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a friend
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 who
have
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has
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 the same thought
and
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apply
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when
is
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talking about any topic 
it
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can be
wrong
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the wrong
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friend
 because if someone
is totally agree
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totally agrees
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 with
this
 situation maybe it is the wrong person to
be
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befriend
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friend
.
Additionally
,
this
 kind of
people
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person
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 maybe is not interested in what are talking about.
Secondly
, a number of
people
 said that
everbody
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everybody
 should make a
friendship
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 who have
oppposite
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opposite
 opinion
with
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from
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 them.
However
, it can be
wrong
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a wrong
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 thing because it means when
people
are
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talk about their problems or any type of
opic
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topic
this
 kind of
friend
al
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all
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 the time
are
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 going to argue with them.
Moreover
, it is the best
friend
 that sometimes
people
 should listen to them.
To conclude
, sometimes
poeple
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people
 think being
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a friend
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friend
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friends
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 is the best thing who have the same or absolutely opposite mind.
However
,
people
 have to careful when they
are choose
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choose
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friend
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a friend
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 because both
type
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types
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 of
friend
 is the best one.
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