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some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same openion as them. Other people believe its good to have friends who some time disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own openion.

Some
people
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 feel that humans
have
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having
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the
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apply
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similar
thought
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thoughts
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 is the best
thing being
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way to be
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friendship
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friends
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on
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; on
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 the rest of them think that
people
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 have to
get
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make
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friend
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friends
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 who have absolutely opposite
opinion
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opinions
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with
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from
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 them. In
this
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 essay, I will argue
being
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that being
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friend
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friends
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whom
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who
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 have both the opposite and the same mind
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people
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apply
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is the best thing. First of
all
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people
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 should make
a
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apply
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friend
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friends
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 for themselves
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however
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; however
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, they should
perfectly
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apply
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pay
attention
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perfect attention
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 in
this
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 situation. Nowadays, most
of
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people
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 want
to
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friends
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friend
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 who have
same
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the same
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interest
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interests
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,
same
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the same
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ability
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abilities
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and
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, and
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 it can be best all over the world.
Sometime
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Sometimes
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people
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 want
to
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apply
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their
friend
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have
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apply
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to absolutely agree
what
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with what
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 they are saying.
Likewise
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, being
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friend
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friends
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 who have the same thought and when
is
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apply
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talking about any
topic
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topic,
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 it can be
wrong
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a wrong
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friend
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 because if someone
is
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apply
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totally
agree
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agrees
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 with
this
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situation
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situation,
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 maybe it is the wrong person to be
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friends
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friend
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.
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with.
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Additionally
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,
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this kind
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these kinds
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 of
people
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maybe is
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may
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 not
interested
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be interested
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 in what
are
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we are
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 talking about.
Secondly
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, a number of
people
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 said that
everbody
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everybody
 should make
a friendship
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friends
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 who have
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an oppposite
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oppposite
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opposite
 opinion
with
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to
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 them.
However
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, it can be
wrong
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a wrong
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 thing because it means when
people
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are
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apply
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talk about their problems or any type of
opic
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topic
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, this
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this kind
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these kinds
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 of
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friend
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friends
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 al the time are
going
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always going
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 to argue with them.
Moreover
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, it is the best
friend
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 that
sometimes
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people should sometimes
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people
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 should listen to
them
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apply
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.
To conclude
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, sometimes
poeple
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people
 think being
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friend
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friends
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 is the best thing
who
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when
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have
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they have
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 the same or absolutely opposite
mind
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minds
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.
However
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,
people
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 have to
careful
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be careful
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 when they
are
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apply
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choose
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friend
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friends
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 because both
type
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types
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 of
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friend
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friends
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is
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are
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 the best
one
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ones
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.

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planning
Plan your essay first. Make a clear plan with an intro, two body parts, and a short end.
clarity
Be clear. State your view in the first part, then keep it in the rest of the essay.
grammar
Use simple grammar and short sent for each idea. Check verb and noun form.
content
Give one or two real points to explain why you think so, and add a tiny example.
content
The writer shows two sides of the issue.
structure
There is a closing line to end the essay.
coherence
Some links help the text flow.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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