The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
These pie charts depict the proportion of adult working
time
spent on a variety of activities in a particular nation between 1958 and 2008. It is clear from the graph that the percentages of all activities have increased except sleeping rates and
also
going out figures.
According to
what is shown, In 1958 we can see 33% of
time
spent on work which is represented the most thing consumed
time
. And, sleeping came after with 32 per
cent
while
hanging out with friends or family nearly a fifth of the
time
. And, stay at home spend 8 per
cent
, other hobbies or doing exercise represented 6% of the
time
whereas
travel to work needs insignificant which is 2 per
cent
only.
Moreover
, in 2008 as we can see the rate of
time
expend increased by 42% and relaxing at home decreased to 13 per
cent
.
While
, other interests or playing sports increased with insignificant and being 8%
also
going out declined and represented at 6%
although
, the
time
needed to go to work increased not that match as we can see it is 8 per-
cent
and sleeping spend rate decreased and reached 25%.
To sum up
, we could say that
the
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time
-consuming in working represented nearly half in 2008 and sleeping declined compared with 1958.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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