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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now “one big traffic jam”. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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In the modern world,
cars
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 are very increased in every place of the world and the total is very rapid over the past thirty years so, in every , nation there has a big
problem
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 with
traffic
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jams
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 of
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jams
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 because of the many
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 on the
road
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. First of all, in many nations that there are have many
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 on the street there will have trouble on the
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, accidents that can make a
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 jam and many people do not respect the laws so, they will make a bad
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 on the
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, someone thinks
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 very important and makes our
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 easier and many people need to use the
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 for family and work. And there think that person is safer than
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 and they do not need to wait for
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 which can make them save time.
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, the
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 is very good for their
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.
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,
cars
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 are very important for everyone's
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, but many
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 can make
traffic
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jams
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 and be dangerous on the
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 so, I think the government should think about it and try to solve
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 as governments should develop
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 and support or promote about
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 for people.
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, I totally agree that a
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 is very beneficial for everyone because the
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 can be made our
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 easy and it is very comfortable. But, many
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 can make trouble on the
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 ,not of
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jams
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 but because many
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 can make a bad environment and others. So, It is very important to think about it and try to solve
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • commute times
  • pollution
  • car purchases
  • fuel prices
  • congestion charges
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • subsidies
  • incentives
  • electric vehicles
  • alternative modes of transportation
  • cycling
  • walking
  • dedicated lanes
  • pathways
  • sustainable options
  • educational campaigns
  • environmental impacts
  • health impacts
  • behavioral change
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