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The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features. You should write at least 150 words.
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The
provive
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provide
 table chart
show
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 the proportion of older people in rural and
rurals
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rural
 areas who use their rest time activities
in
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from
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 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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, the most popular task was reading and the
least
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last
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 one was photography. In 1990,
realding
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reading
 in rural was higher than the
last
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 one by 10 per
cent
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.
Moreover
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, the
last
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 3
acitivies
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activities
 in rural
was
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 higher than
urban
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in urban
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 too. in 2010, the features of reading in urban
was
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 the same as
rural
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in rural
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 with 78 per
cent
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. Animated in rural was the same per
cent
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 for
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last
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the last
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 20 years about 10 per
cent
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. Playing in urban was
droped
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dropped
 slightly by 7 per
cent
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for
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over
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 the
last
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 20 years. The
last
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one
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apply
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activity
acitivity
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activity
 was photography, in urban it increase suddenly but it
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also
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was also
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 lower than it in rural
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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