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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates
carbon
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dioxide
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pollution
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 by residents in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007, Units are measured in
tonnes
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the among of the British
pollution
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 is throughout the period of the time,
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 Italian and Portugal's people finish at a significant increase and the Swedish dropped dramatically
at the end
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 of the period. During forty years, the British
cost
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 the most
carbon
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dioxide
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pollution
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 than other countries, standing at 11
tonnes
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 per year in 1967 and
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 ending up with a steady decline to 9
tonnes
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 in 2007. Swedish
pollution
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 costs begin at about 8.5
tonnes
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 but rose sharply in the next year, reaching over 10
tonnes
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, which almost surpasses the British.
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, by the following year, people in Sweden decrease the among of
carbon
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dioxide
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pollution
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 considerably and become the least polluting in
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 survey.
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, the
carbon
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dioxide
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pollution
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cost
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 in Italy and Portugal in
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 period is most likely processed. Both of the countries have grown marginally until 1997. which accounts for 5
tonnes
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 of Italian
cost
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 and 7.5
tonnes
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 of Portugal residents.
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, Italian level off the
pollution
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cost
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, but Portugal have a slight increase in 2007.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, pollution, tonnes, cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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