Some people think that having a set retirement age (eg. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that a certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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justice in their working life.

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than the rookies are still necessary in every industry.

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their working abilities. Should some careers become older, these workers will lead to several problems in their working process

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society.

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safety on the road is a must during his working hours may suffer an accident, which brings about not only a mistake but a possible death

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each

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don’t agree with

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to rely on

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and

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should get

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