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The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the pie charts illustrate the proportion of men and women
workers
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 in nation A and nation b.
overall
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, both countries have a majority of
males
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 and females working in
services
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. remarkably, in country b, only a meagre percentage of
workers
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 are recorded in agriculture.
to begin
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 with, in the country , over 55% of
males
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 work in
services
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, which is 2 times higher than that in the agricultural sector, accounting for 29%. the proportion of men
workers
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 in the industry reaches 15% in comparison with only 8% in terms of females.
furthermore
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, the figure for women working in
services
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 and agriculture make up 49% and 43%, respectively. in country b, the category of
services
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 heads the list with 65% of
males
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 and 49% of females.
however
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, the number of women
workers
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 in agriculture is by far the least important, taking up 1%, compared with 3% of men
workers
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. the proportion of female employment in industry in
this
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 nation is 11%, which is nearly 3 times lower than the figure for
males
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, males, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • gender employment rate
  • workforce
  • disparity
  • employment trend
  • notable difference
  • counterpart
  • demographic
  • labor market
  • sector
  • predominantly
  • employment rate
  • analysis
  • comparative study
  • statistical data
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