the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The two pie
charts
illustrate two things;
first,
energy
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the energy
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that is
used by an average Australian household and
second,
its results in greenhouse gas emissions.
overally
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Overall
, heating and water heating own the biggest parts of both
charts
. but the significant part of these
charts
is that all the energies increase in greenhouse gas emission process except heating which is reduced. cooling and lighting have the lowest proportion in both
charts
. heating and water heating have the largest percentage of usage by
household
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the household
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at 42 and 30 respectively. After that, other appliances
has
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15% and refrigeration has 7% of energy usage. cooling and lighting have the lowest proportion in all of them at about 2 and 4 respectively. water heating and other appliances have the biggest part greenhouse gas emissions chart at 32 and 28
percentage
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respectively. heating is in
the
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third place at 15%. cooling with 3% and lighting with 8% are still in
lowest
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the lowest
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place in the second chart.
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  • categorizes
  • constitutes
  • portion
  • substantial majority
  • energy efficiency
  • potentially
  • contributors
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • noticeable shift
  • proportion
  • relative contribution
  • disproportionate emissions
  • environmental impact
  • inefficiencies
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