The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.

The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.
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The pie charts below illustrate the percentage of men and women who occupied three different sectors in two towns in the year 1960 and 2010 respectively. A significant change can be seen in
town
A compared to
town
B
.
Firstly
, In the year 1960, in both A and
B
towns, people mostly worked in the manufacturing field
whereas
in
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2010, the least number of employees were from manufacturing in
town
A
while
in
town
B
the least popular sector was sales.
Moreover
, in
town
A, the number of workers in the sales division dropped in half from 30% to 16% over a 50-year period of time
while
in
town
B
, the percentage remained almost the same from 1960 to 2010. In both towns, the number of heads worked in the service section had more than doubled over the 50 years.
However
, in the year 1960, the percentage of people who were involved in services was high in
town
A compared to
town
B
in 2010.
Additionally
, in
town
B
, more than half were involved in production-related jobs in both 1960 and 2010
although
in
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town
A, it has been reduced in half from 41% to 20% over the time
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