The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.
The pie charts below illustrate the percentage of men and women who occupied three different sectors in two towns in the year 1960 and 2010 respectively. A significant change can be seen in
town
A compared to town
B
.
Firstly
, In the year 1960, in both A and B
towns, people mostly worked in the manufacturing field whereas
in
2010, the least number of employees were from manufacturing in Add the comma(s)
,in
town
A while
in town
B
the least popular sector was sales. Moreover
, in town
A, the number of workers in the sales division dropped in half from 30% to 16% over a 50-year period of time while
in town
B
, the percentage remained almost the same from 1960 to 2010.
In both towns, the number of heads worked in the service section had more than doubled over the 50 years. However
, in the year 1960, the percentage of people who were involved in services was high in town
A compared to town
B
in 2010. Additionally
, in town
B
, more than half were involved in production-related jobs in both 1960 and 2010 although
in
Add the comma(s)
,in
town
A, it has been reduced in half from 41% to 20% over the timeSubmitted by vishvaisuranga on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, b with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
▼