In some countries, if people need to find work, they have to move away from their families and their friends. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It is a fact that migration become a trend
for
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nowadays . Everyone
want
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a good life and value in society so today
i
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would like to highlight both advantages and disadvantages of a given topic. On the positive side , it is good to be independent if
people
find work in other
countries
they work for themselves to fulfil daily needs and cover their expenses
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their own so parents get less burden.
Moreover
,
people
learnt about
a new cultures
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and adopt different environments which helps to improve their knowledge
as well as
communication skills.
In addition
to
this
,
people
tackle
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different tasks and activities
it
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makes
more
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attractive and creative towards new things . It
make
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people
more hardworking and valuable. 
In contrast
, there is no garden without weeds if it moving to other
countries
for jobs have a
upteem
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umpteen
team
advantages . At the same time, there are
also
some disadvantages . First of all, it is very hard to find a job in other
countries
especially which one is getting overpopulated in
this
case
people
get lack
of
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opportunities for jobs and they suffer from financial difficulties which cause mental illness which
forcesthem
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forces them
to commit suicide
for example
, in Brampton students commit suicide because their expenses are more than income,
Secondly
it causes homesickness. Lack of interconnection with parents causes a complication and emotional effects. To put it in a nutshell, after discussing both pros and cons of both sides,
i
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have come to the conclusion that the advantages overweight the disadvantages because in today's
era
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there is
a
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value for money so to achieve money
people
need a job if we get it from other
countries
than it is better to move to other
countries
.
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