In some countries, if people need to find work, they have to move away from their families and their friends. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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opportunities for jobs and they suffer from financial difficulties which cause mental illness which

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it causes homesickness. Lack of interconnection with parents causes a complication and emotional effects. To put it in a nutshell, after discussing both pros and cons of both sides,

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have come to the conclusion that the advantages overweight the disadvantages because in today's

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value for money so to achieve money

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In some countries, if people need to find work, they have to move away from their families and their friends. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

some people think that success in life comes form hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree with that statement?

Some think they can use as much fresh water as they want, but others say governments should limit water use because it is not endless. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people say children no longer need to develop handwriting skills. Others believe that handwriting is still important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.