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Write a letter to the hiring manager. In your letter Say why you are applying for this international position Describe the job you are currently doing for the company Tell him/her why you think you will be good at the job

#manager #position #job #company
Dear Manager, My name is Manpreet Kaur. Yesterday I saw your
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 regarding
work
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 looking for
work
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am apply
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this
 job because I am
very
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hard working
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 person and I understand very easily . My current job is
supervisor
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a supervisor
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 in
electronic
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an electronic
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 company where
i
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 do my responsibilities like, how to
work
 start and how to manage all staff
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one most important thing is that
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also
do
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make
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of
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workers's
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. I think I will be
good
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a good
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 fit
in
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this
 role because I meet all the
requirement
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 experience and hard
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. Yours faithfully, Manpreet Kaur.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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