The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonate drinks. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pictures highlight the steps necessary in the production of carbonated drinks.
Overall
, the process of making carbonated drinks involves five stages, from water
cleaning to packaging and delivery to the supermarket.
Firstly
, in the first stage, the raw water
is pumped into a water
filter to remove unwanted substances. Afterwards, a water
softener is used to remove some particular minerals from the water
. Then
it was chemically treated before being passed onto a pump.
In the second stage, it is first heated by electric heaters and then
goes through a cooling pipe into the tank that is
pumped with carbon dioxide to produce the carbonated drink.
Later, this
carbonated drink is pumped into a mixing tank where colouring, syrup, and flavouring are combined. Finally
, at the final stage, the finished mixture is packaged into boxes and delivered to the supermarket.Submitted by vihoaithichngu on
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