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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Madhur Bathla I saw an advertisement in Times Magazine ( Australia) regarding the role of handling your
six year old
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 child, and I would like to showcase my interest towards the job offered. Since I was a teenager I
had
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 always enjoyed the company of children, there are a lot of kids in my
nighbourhood
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neighbourhood
 who often visit my place to meet me.
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, I have a friendly bond with each one of them and they too enjoy my availability around them. I
carry
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a
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5 years of rich experience
of
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 running a day care.
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, I was a
full time
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 teacher at a kindergarten in Queensland where I had been employed
from
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 the
last
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 ten years.
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,
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 my relocation to
Sydney
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 I am exploring the job opportunities down here. In my free
space
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 I tend to go for a walk in the park and meet new people.
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, I am a yoga enthusiast, I conduct virtual yoga sessions over the weekends.
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, I am planning to initiate
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 sessions with the local crowd of Sydney too, but I am still exploring the city. I look forward to
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 from you soon. Yours Faithfully, Madhur Bathla
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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