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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The chart depicts the amount of
money
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 generated by the exportation of different
products
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 over the period between 2015 to 2016, divided by two charts the first one about the
money
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 that was collected by each product and the second about the raise in
percentage
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 during the given time.
Overall
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 it can be seen that Petroleum
products
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 and Engineered goods are the major sources of
incomes
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income
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,
while
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the
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apply
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textiles were the lowest
money
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 fount.
Initially
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, Petroleum
products
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 started the time being the highest income, accounting for 60
billion
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dollars
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,
while
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 textiles represented almost 25
billion
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dollars
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 in the same year.
Moreover
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, in 2016 Engineered goods presented the same amount of
money
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 collected as Petroleum
products
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, comprehending 60
billion
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dollars
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,
however
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 in the period, agricultural
products
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 were responsible for just 30
billion
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dollars
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, being the same in the two years given.
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, when it comes to
percentage
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, the only product that showed a decrease in Gems and jewellery, which in the time gives, accounted for 5.18%,
while
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 the other three categories showed an increase in
percentage
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 during the two years. To summarize, it is possible to see that germs and jewellery, agriculture and textile
products
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 were the lowest
source
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sources
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 of income,
while
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 in
percentage
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 textiles were the highest number, followed by Engineered goods.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, products, percentage, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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