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Nowadays people prefer to shop in large supermarkets rather than nearby local shops. Why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or a negative trend?

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In the present circumstances,
people
 prefer to do their shopping in larger
supermarkets
 rather than !
shops
 in their locality. There are several reasons to explain
this
 statement which I will elaborate
.
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This
 trend has its pros and cons which I will
also
 explain in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, the reason that
people
 are shifting to shop in
supermarkets
 is because of the variety of
products
 offered, are at a more competitive
price
, the
products
 are even fresher.
Moreover
,
supermarkets
 offer facilities for parking and more space that allows
people
 to circulate freely and get all their
products
 in a single place and they have the choice to pick up the
products
 they want as well.
Whereas
, the local
shops
 sometimes are not accessible, have less variety of
products
 and
furthermore
, the
price
 is higher than the one in the supermarket. Small local
shops
 are often inaccessible, and
people
 have to walk long distances to get a shop. The advantage of shopping in
supermarkets
 is that
people
 have
products
 at a lower
price
 compared to local
shops
 which most of the time are higher.
Hence
, local markets have to close their doors
due to
supermarkets
. On the other side,
supermarkets
 can be situated very far from the centre of town,
people
 need to drive very long distances to go to the supermarket. On the other side, most
supermarkets
 are found in shopping malls which allows
people
 to their shopping for both household and clothes and at the same time they can dine in the food courts available. In conclusion,
supermarkets
 have facilitated
people
's life in shopping. Many shopping malls manufacture their own
products
,
thus
 providing a reduced
price
 to the shoppers.
However
 local
shops
 are still very helpful to
people
 if they want to buy small
products
 which are near their workplace.
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