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Nowadays people prefer to shop in large supermarkets rather than nearby local shops. Why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or a negative trend?

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In the present circumstances,
people
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 prefer to do their shopping in larger
supermarkets
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 rather than !
shops
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 in their locality. There are several reasons to explain
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This
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 trend has its pros and cons which I will
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 explain in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
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, the reason that
people
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 are shifting to shop in
supermarkets
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 is because of the variety of
products
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 offered, are at a more competitive
price
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, the
products
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 are even fresher.
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,
supermarkets
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 offer facilities for parking and more space that allows
people
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 to circulate freely and get all their
products
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 in a single place and they have the choice to pick up the
products
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 they want as well.
Whereas
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, the local
shops
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 sometimes are not accessible, have less variety of
products
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 and
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, the
price
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 is higher than the one in the supermarket. Small local
shops
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 are often inaccessible, and
people
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 have to walk long distances to get a shop. The advantage of shopping in
supermarkets
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 is that
people
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 have
products
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 at a lower
price
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 compared to local
shops
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 which most of the time are higher.
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, local markets have to close their doors
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supermarkets
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. On the other side,
supermarkets
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 can be situated very far from the centre of town,
people
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 need to drive very long distances to go to the supermarket. On the other side, most
supermarkets
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 are found in shopping malls which allows
people
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 to their shopping for both household and clothes and at the same time they can dine in the food courts available. In conclusion,
supermarkets
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 have facilitated
people
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's life in shopping. Many shopping malls manufacture their own
products
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,
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 providing a reduced
price
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 to the shoppers.
However
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 local
shops
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 are still very helpful to
people
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 if they want to buy small
products
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 which are near their workplace.
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