GRAPH SHOW THE CONSUMPTION OF FISH AND SOME DIFFERENT KINDS OF MEAT IN EUROPEAN COUNTRY BETWEEN 1979 AND 2004.
The graph presents the consumption of fish,
lamb
, beef and Use synonyms
chicken
in a European country over twenty-five years (1979-2004). Use synonyms
Overall
, we can see a great change in eating habits where Linking Words
chicken
and beef switched positions and Use synonyms
lamb
and fish had the more consistentUse synonyms
behavior
. In 1979, 60 Change the spelling
behaviour
grams
of fish were consumed and in 2004, after falling slightly, it remained steady and ended the period Use synonyms
in
48 Change preposition
with
grams
. Beef was the most consumed Use synonyms
in
the beginning of the period, around 225 Change the preposition
at
grams
per week, but after some fluctuation, after 1994 it dropped sharply to 110 Use synonyms
grams
, finishing in second place. When the research began, Use synonyms
lamb
and Use synonyms
chicken
were almost equal in consumption values (150 Use synonyms
grams
per week), Use synonyms
Linking Words
however
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however,
lamb
declined Use synonyms
while
fluctuating over the years and in 2004 the average consumption was 60 Linking Words
grams
, Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
chicken
consistently moved up and finished in 250 Use synonyms
grams
, the highest of all. Use synonyms
To conclude
, it is possible to see that there has been a significant change in the pattern of two of the four main sources and Linking Words
chicken
became the number one, maintaining a considerable advantage in comparison with others.Use synonyms
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