GRAPH SHOW THE CONSUMPTION OF FISH AND SOME DIFFERENT KINDS OF MEAT IN EUROPEAN COUNTRY BETWEEN 1979 AND 2004.

GRAPH SHOW THE CONSUMPTION OF FISH AND SOME DIFFERENT KINDS OF  MEAT IN EUROPEAN COUNTRY BETWEEN 1979 AND 2004.
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The graph presents the consumption of fish,
lamb
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, beef and
chicken
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in a European country over twenty-five years (1979-2004).
Overall
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, we can see a great change in eating habits where
chicken
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and beef switched positions and
lamb
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and fish had the more consistent
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. In 1979, 60
grams
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of fish were consumed and in 2004, after falling slightly, it remained steady and ended the period
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48
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. Beef was the most consumed
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the beginning of the period, around 225
grams
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per week, but after some fluctuation, after 1994 it dropped sharply to 110
grams
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, finishing in second place. When the research began,
lamb
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and
chicken
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were almost equal in consumption values (150
grams
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per week),
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however
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lamb
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declined
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fluctuating over the years and in 2004 the average consumption was 60
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,
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chicken
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consistently moved up and finished in 250
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, the highest of all.
To conclude
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, it is possible to see that there has been a significant change in the pattern of two of the four main sources and
chicken
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became the number one, maintaining a considerable advantage in comparison with others.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lamb, chicken, grams with synonyms.
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