GRAPH SHOW THE CONSUMPTION OF FISH AND SOME DIFFERENT KINDS OF MEAT IN EUROPEAN COUNTRY BETWEEN 1979 AND 2004.

GRAPH SHOW THE CONSUMPTION OF FISH AND SOME DIFFERENT KINDS OF  MEAT IN EUROPEAN COUNTRY BETWEEN 1979 AND 2004.
The graph presents the consumption of fish,
lamb
, beef and
chicken
in a European country over twenty-five years (1979-2004).
Overall
, we can see a great change in eating habits where
chicken
and beef switched positions and
lamb
and fish had the more consistent
behavior
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. In 1979, 60
grams
of fish were consumed and in 2004, after falling slightly, it remained steady and ended the period
in
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48
grams
. Beef was the most consumed
in
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at
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the beginning of the period, around 225
grams
per week, but after some fluctuation, after 1994 it dropped sharply to 110
grams
, finishing in second place. When the research began,
lamb
and
chicken
were almost equal in consumption values (150
grams
per week),
however
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lamb
declined
while
fluctuating over the years and in 2004 the average consumption was 60
grams
,
while
chicken
consistently moved up and finished in 250
grams
, the highest of all.
To conclude
, it is possible to see that there has been a significant change in the pattern of two of the four main sources and
chicken
became the number one, maintaining a considerable advantage in comparison with others.
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